Examples, Editing

Light edit …In fact I used to have a lot of nightmares about that horse. I was pregnant then, ten months pregnant, and really big. I didn’t even know how to ride a horse and had hardly ever been on one, and I was afraid to learn at that point, especially to learn how to ride on a horse that everybody said was very difficult and had thrush. The horse’s name by the way was Bugger Bear.

Medium edit …In fact, I used to have a lot of nightmares about that horse. I was ten[TRUE??] months pregnant then, and really big. I didn’t know how to ride a horse and had hardly ever been on one. I was afraid to learn at that point, especially on a horse that everybody said was very difficult, and who had thrush. The horse’s name, by the way, was Bugger Bear.

Heavy edit (after discussion with writer)
…In fact, I used to have nightmares about that horse, who was notoriously difficult­ (his name was Bugger Bear) and had a painful foot condition called thrush. I was six months pregnant, very big, and it didn’t seem like the right time to learn how to ride.

 

 

Original …...  In fact I used to have a lot of nightmares--  about that horse. I was   pregnant then, ten months pregnant, and really big  .  I didn’t even know how to ride a house and had hardly ever been one  on, and I was afraid to learn at that point, especially to learn how to ride on  a horse that everybody said was very difficult and that had thrush,.  The horse’s name by the way was Bugger Bear.

— excerpted from Back-to-the-Land,
                            A Boomer Memoir